雅思写作7分 2

如何取得雅思小作文7分模板范文

在本指南中,我们将演示如何在雅思一般写作考试中取得雅思小作文7分更高的分数。我们会给你一些关键的词汇,分段的提示,样例答案和更多的帮助你达到7 + , 让我们开始吧!

雅思小作文评分标准(第7至9级)

雅思一般写作任务1你必须在20分钟内写一封150字以上的信。这封信要么是正式的,要么是非正式的,取决于收信人。分值相当于雅思写作总分的40% 。关于雅思口语备考请参考:30个提高成绩的雅思口语短语及例句

雅思小作文7分模板范文第7至9级的标记准则:

这项任务的标准分为4个部分:

  • Task achievement (25%) 任务成就(25%)
  • Coherence & cohesion (25%) 连贯与衔接(25%)
  • Lexical resource (25%) 词汇资源(25%)
  • Grammatical range & accuracy (25%) 语法范围和准确性(25%)

7分标准

任务完成情况连贯性和凝聚力 词法资源语法范围及准确性
1.成功地覆盖了任务要求的大部分内容
2.目的明确,语调连贯简洁
3.清楚地列出要点,但要点可以更长
1.逻辑地组织思想和关键信息
2. 有效地使用连词来指代前面的点
1.使用大量不同的词汇
2.使用少量不常用的口语词组
3.一些小错误,包括拼写错误
1.使用复杂的结构,例如 third conditional
2.经常写出没有语法错误的句子
3.可能会出现一些标点错误

8分标准

任务完成情况连贯性和凝聚力词汇资源语法范围及准确性
1.成功地覆盖了任务要求的所有内容
2.清楚地表达要点
1.思想和信息是有逻辑的
2.段落写得很好
3.这封信有效地连接在一起
1.使用范围广泛的词汇
2.很好地使用口语术语
3.很少有拼写错误
1.大多数句子都没有错误
2.使用了大量复杂的语法
3.只有一些错误

9分标准

任务完成情况连贯性和凝聚力词法资源语法范围及准确性
写出涵盖所有关键点的完善的响应段落写得非常好自然地使用范围广泛的词汇准确地使用大量复杂的语法

如果你想要高分:

  • 段落和标点符合要求
  • 把你的想法和信息有效地联系起来
  • 使用范围广泛的词汇(包括俗语)
  • 包括复杂的语法
  • 有正确的语气/风格
  • 正确拼写单词
  • 回答任务中的要点
雅思小作文7分

如何正确组织和规划

通常在考试中,你会有这样一个任务:
你的一个朋友说他们会在你度假时照看你的房子和你的宠物。给你的朋友写一封信。在你的信中:

  • 当你不在的时候留下联系人的详细信息
  • 留下如何照顾你的宠物的指示
  • 描述家务活

为了做好计划,你必须首先确定这封信是写给谁的。这一点非常重要,因为如果你首先确定收信人,你就有更大的机会成功完成写作任务。在雅思写作第一部分中,他们通常使用以下类型的收件人:

非正式接受者正式接受者
朋友,家人,邻居,男朋友/女朋友同事、老板、政府官员、企业、学校、大学、紧急服务机构、教师

在这个示例任务中,这封信是写给一个朋友的。这告诉我们,这封信是非正式的,因此我们必须使用适当的非正式语言和称呼。在你开始计划之前做出决定是很重要的。

接下来,看看这三个要点。当你写作的时候,把这些要点分成三个主要段落。这就是所谓的“身体”。当你计划的时候,一定要在每个 x3项目符号下面写下至少 x3个关键点子(总共至少9个点子)。

你的最终计划应该是这样的:

  • Salutation, 敬礼,
  • Opening line 开场白
  • 第1段——三个想法
  • 第2段——三个想法
  • 第3段——三个想法
  • Closing line, 结束语,
  • Ending 结束

记住,称呼与开场白是不同的。称呼是以向收信人问好开始的,但是开头的一行对于开始信件的主体部分很重要.

此模板对于正式和非正式信函都是相同的,并且不会改变。
再看看你的计划。你的计划: 坚持完成任务,使用好段落,拥有广泛的词汇,包含复杂的语法(如条件句,短语动词和关系从句)吗?
如果是这样,你计划得很好!

记住,当涉及到写作时,计划对于“良好的结构”是极其重要的。没有计划你是不会参加战斗的,雅思写作任务1也是一样!在完成这项任务时,最多花5分钟时间进行计划。

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如何写非正式信件

如何开始和结束一封非正式的信

问候语结束 *
Hey, Hi, Hiya, Hello, Dear + name of personThanks, Cheers, Thanks a bunch, Thanks a billion Ta very much, See you soon, See you later, Bye, Lots of love, Love + your name

记住你选择的结尾取决于信的上下文。例如,如果这个人正在为你做事,那么使用: thanks,cheers,thanks a bunch,thanks a million,ta very。
如果你已经和这个人有了计划,使用: see you soon,see you later。
你可以在任何非正式场合使用诸如 bye,love,and lots of love 这样的结尾。使用这些之后一定要加上你的名字。

非正式信函的类型及开头和结尾

雅思一般写作任务1有不同类型的非正式信函。信件包括: 感谢某人,询问某人近况,回复长时间联系你的某人,回复好消息,回复坏消息,回复计划,制定计划。看看下面好的开头和结尾。

信件类别
1)感谢某人Thank you for (the thing you are thanking them for). I really appreciate it.Thank you again for your thoughtfulness, Thank you for everything you have done, Thanks once more.
2)询问别人的近况I hope life is treating you well I hope all is well, How are you?, How are you doing?Speak soon, Keep in touch, Take care.
3)回应那些在很长一段时间后第一个联系你的人Lovely to hear from you, Thanks for getting in touch, What a lovely surprise, Long time no speak.Hopefully speak soon, Let’s not leave it so long   next time, Keep me in the loop.
4)回应好消息That’s excellent news, I’m so happy for you, Good for you, I am over the moon for you, Congrats on (insert good news).Congratulations once again, I wish you all the best.
5)回应坏消息I hope you’re doing ok, Sorry to hear about (insert bad news), How are you holding up?My thoughts are with you, Let me know if you need to chat, I sincerely hope you feel better soon.
6)对计划做出回应Thank you for inviting me to (state plan), I’m delighted to receive this.Let me know your thoughts, Thanks again for thinking of me, Thanks again for having me in mind.
7)制定计划I was wondering if you would like to (state plan)?, Are you about (state date)?Let me know your thoughts, I hope to see you soon, Let me know if you fancy going/coming

在非正式信函中加入习语。像“ i am over the moon”(意思是我很高兴)和“ keep me in the loop”(意思是随时向我汇报最新情况)这样的习语是很好的用法。

雅思小作文7分模板范文非正式信函的例子(第7-9分)

看看下面的例子和改进反馈。

雅思小作文非正式7分范文

你移民到了另一个国家。写一封信给你的朋友,他已经联系你很长时间了。在你的信中:

  • 描述你现在的生活
  • 告诉他/她你为什么选择这个国家
  • 你喜欢你的新国家什么
Dear Liz,

Lovely to hear from you.

I am writing to inform you that I have moved to Paris, France. We arrived in Paris in Spring and finally we have settled down.

We moved to Paris because my brothers also migrated there nine years ago. We have planed to join them in Paris and also did this for the children’s schooling and their future as well.

We have just decorated our new home and the kids are enjoying the city’s museums almost every day. They have been attending a private school and have made a lot of friends. The people here are helpful. Jim has also found a job near the city as an accountant. The working environment here  is different from Japan, according to Jim. I am a full-time housewife and I really enjoy having a morning coffee at a local café with a newspaper. Do let me know when you plan to visit Paris. You are always welcome to stay here.

Hopefully speak soon.

Love,
Claire

改善反馈:

这是一封好信。作者把任务中的所有要点都包括进去了,段落划得很好。然而,还是有一些小错误。例如,planed 应该拼写 planned,短语“I am writing to inform you”对于朋友来说太正式了。最好是说‘I am writing to let you know’。对于作者来说,多谈谈他们对这个新国家的喜爱也是件好事。

在信的末尾花三分钟时间检查你的信。练习的一个好方法是大声朗读这封信,看看是否有错误。在考试前习惯于校对你自己的书面作业

雅思小作文非正式8分范文

写一封信给你的朋友,邀请他/她参加你的家庭聚会。在你的信中:

  • 解释一下你为什么要组织这个聚会
  • 描述你打算做什么
  • 告诉你的朋友在聚会上有多重要
Dear Paul,

Are you about this weekend?

It is my mum’s birthday, and we are throwing a small party for close friends and family. Come along! The party is going to be in the Italian restaurant on the Main Road, where we used to spend a lot of quality time together. I’m sure you know the way to the Italian restaurant very well, but in case you can’t remember to WhatsApp me and I will send you the address so you can google maps it.

The party will be fun. We will; listen to music, eat lots of Italian food, and drink nice bottles of wine. I am also bringing a cake along.

We have been friends for a long time now, and you know how much my mum loves you. She will be very happy if you come. I know you haven’t seen each other since you started university. I hope you are doing well there, and my mum and I would love to hear all about it at the party.  Hope to see you very soon.

Take care,
Lee

改进反馈:

这是一封措辞强烈的信。所有的要点都得到了充分的解释。为了得到9分,需要使用更好的词汇。其他表示very happy 的词是thrilled 或者over the moon

雅思小作文非正式9分范文

你的一个朋友最近给了你一个很好的生日礼物。写一封信给你的朋友。在你的信中:

  • 谢谢她的礼物,说出你为什么喜欢它
  • 描述你收到的其他礼物
  • 解释一下你生日那天做的事情
Dear Sam,

Thank you for your present. I really appreciate it and want you to know how much it means to me.

I don’t think I’ve ever gotten something quite as lovely as this original, hand-made photo album with photos and notes which remind me of our childhood. I think that all these memories have helped us stay close throughout the years and though we live a long way from each other now, I hope I can add to this album every time we meet up.

With the calligraphy set mum gave to me and the camera I got from my dad, I can easily continue this special work of art!

It was a bit sad that you couldn’t be there for my actual birthday and only the party. I went to the spa with my parents and my cousin. We went to the stunning seaside resort that we often used to go to when we were younger. Do you remember the big sauna room and pool there? Well, everything is still more or less the same, which is good because it was so calm and fancy.

We topped the day off with a nice meal too. What a lovely day it was! I hope you can be there next time.
Thanks once more for this wonderful gift

Lots of love,
Alison

改进反馈:

这封信写得太棒了。语法和词汇的使用率很高。好的形容词,如hand-made,,stunning的和fancy,使这封信成为一个9分小作文。

写下基本的形容词,如fun, sad, beautiful, big, small, long, short, happy and boring.。查查同义词词典。为这些形容词至少写5个同义词。重复使用其他基本形容词,使你的词汇更加复杂。

如何写正式的信件

问候语结束
Dear Sir/Madam, Dear Mr, Mrs, Ms (name), To whom this may concern*Yours faithfully, Yours sincerely, Cordially, Kindest regards

当我们不知道收件人的姓名时,我们使用“致可能与此有关的人”。

正式信函的类型及开头和结尾行
雅思一般写作任务1有不同类型的正式信函。信件包括: 投诉、计划商业活动、回复广告和辞职。

信件类别开场白结束
1)投诉I am writing to complain about (name what you want to complain about).Please contact me via my telephone number to resolve the issue quickly, I shall have to take matters further if they are not solved in a timely manner.
2)计划商业活动I am responsible for planning the (name event),I hope to hear from you soon, I will wait for further information on your decision.
3)回应广告I have recently seen your advertisement for…, I am writing in response to your advertisement for…I look forward to hearing from you soon, I await your response.
4)离开你的工作I regret to inform you I am giving you my notice for this position, I am sorry to say that I am writing this letter to leave my role as (state job)I hope you find a suitable candidate to replace me, I wish you all the best in looking for a replacement. 

正式书信的范文(第7-9段)

看看下面的例子和改进反馈。

雅思小作文正式7分范文

你从汽车租赁公司租了辆车。暖气坏了。你一个星期前给公司打过电话,但是它还没有修好。

给公司写一封信。在你的信中:

  • 自我介绍
  • 解释一下情况
  • 说出你希望公司采取的行动
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to complain about the heating in my car, which I took on rent from your company eight days ago. Unfortunately, it has stopped working.

I rented a Ford Fiesta for two weeks. My customer number is 2000. Actually, I was on my way from London to Manchester, and a loud sound came from the engine. At first, I thought that the engine was broken and I might not be able to drive the car.  However, when I felt no air coming from the heater, I realized it stopped working.

When I got back to my hotel, I instantly contacted your customer care helpline and registered my complaint. They issued me a complaint number 141414 and said that they will send a worker at my hotel within 1 – 2 business days to get it fixed. A week has almost passed since I called, but it is still not repaired.

I am not satisfied with your customer service. If you cannot resolve my problem within 2 days after you have received this letter, I want a complete refund of the car rental payment.

I shall have to take matters further if they are not solved in a timely manner.

Yours faithfully,
Helen Saifa.

改善反馈:

很好地利用了所有的要点和段落。一些语法错误,比如“send a work at my hotel instead of ‘to my hotel”。‘Which I took on rent’应该是‘我租的房子’。经常检查介词和动词是否正确。

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雅思小作文正式8分范文:

你是一名秘书,正在策划一项公司活动。给一家娱乐公司写一封信:

  • 说明你想组织什么样的派对
  • 指出活动的日期和时间
  • 你的特殊要求
To whom this may concern,

I am a secretary at JLP Ltd and I am responsible for planning our company’s annual summer dinner party. I am writing to explain our requirements.

The company would like to celebrate at Novotel Hotel on 18th July at 6:00 PM. Our goal is to have a light-hearted event for all staff members. We would like to start with a magic show before dinner is served.

We also want to include a live music show after the dinner and to arrange some indoor team games for staff members before the event finishes.

Apart from this, I would like to request an experienced event ambassador, who can speak both English and Spanish fluently for this party as we are inviting some of the staff from our Spain office.

If you need further information you can contact me via email callum@JLP.com or call my office number 0660779134.

Yours Sincerely,
Callum Lamb

改进反馈:

一封非常有说服力的信,把所有的观点都写得很好。为了改进这封信,最好增加更多关于活动内容的词汇。例如,晚餐吃什么食物?会有什么样的游戏?还要注意在正式信函中使用“want”。‘Would like’更好。

雅思小作文正式9分范文

你已经看到一则学习外语的晚间课程广告。给提供这门课程的机构写一封信。在你的信中:

  • 询问课程的细节
  • 询问课程教师是否是合格的母语人士
  • 要求机构寄给你他们的小册子
Dear Sir / Madam,

I have recently seen your advertisement for the Portuguese-language, morning course that your institution is offering and I have a few questions.

I am an advanced speaker in Portuguese and I would like to know what this course comprises of, so that I can decide if it aligns with my abilities and whether I would need to sign up for another course.

I would also like to be informed as to whether the teachers in the school are qualified and mother-tongue speakers. I firmly believe this is incredibly important in order to get a veritable insight into the culture of language being studied. A native teacher tends to have the greatest knowledge of the language that they are teaching.

Finally, I would like to inquire if it is possible for you to send me a document of the different courses offered at your language institution.

I look forward to your response.

Cordially,
Pam Harris

改进反馈:

这封信写得很好。作者使用了优秀的句子连接词来保持衔接,并使用了广泛的词汇,例如 veritable。这是一篇很好的乐队9的作品。

非正式信函与正式信函的差异摘要

非正式的正式的
以名字结束以全名结束
使用缩写,例如 ca’t,i’m不要使用缩写
使用 want/would like使用会喜欢
个人沟通专业的沟通
使用更多的形容词少用形容词

总结

以上介绍完了雅思小作文范文,下面试着为雅思小作文写作以下这些书信。

你最近在超级市场买了一些食物,但是,当你回到家时,你发现食物的状况很糟糕。给超市经理写一封信。在你的信中:

  • 解释一下发生了什么事
  • 详细说明购买的日期和时间
  • 问问经理他/她对你的经历有什么打算

你在为一家公司工作。你需要从工作中抽出一些时间来问问你的经理。给你的经理写一封信。在你的信中:

  • 解释为什么你想请假
  • 详细说明你所需要的时间
  • 建议如何在你不在的时候完成你的工作

在你开始写作之前,记住以下5点:

  1. 确定这封信是正式的还是非正式的
  2. 识别出正式/非正式信函的类型,这将有助于你写开头和结尾
  3. 做5分钟的计划。包括三个观点的三个要点和使用要点的段落。确保计划包括良好的词汇,短语动词和语法结构,如条件句
  4. 写12分钟,用你的计划作为写作的指导
  5. 检查3分钟。看看你是否把所有字都拼对了。自己大声朗读这封信。它们之间的联系是否良好?当你读它的时候,一切听起来都好吗?
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